The clock is ticking. And for some people it keeps ticking. Around the world girls my age are dealing with sexism and gender inequality. Their parents and family, believe that the only way they can offer help to their society is by cleaning houses, and making babies. The principles in their village is that men are the ones who should be educated, and they are the ones who run the village. The Girl Effect is here to prove them wrong. The Girl Effect is here to show them that girls are as important as boys, that girls can be a helping hand, that girls can make a change. Gender Equality is worth fighting for.
It all starts with a twelve-year-old girl. She could get educated, buy a cow earn money, and soon have a herd of cows. This quickly becomes a business that is earning sufficient money. This benefits her family, and they benefit the village buy get a supply of clean water. Do you see what this is getting at? Better villages, means better countries, which means a better world.
Gender Equality is worth fighting for because if women were given a chance to education they could make a huge impetus of change to this vast world.
| Additionally gender equality is worth fighting for because our world could be a harmonious place. Girls wouldn’t live in oppression, and all girls would have the chance to live their dream. The dream they thought they would keeping dreaming of. They could live a life just like you and me. Gender equality would give them the right to rights. |
Without gender equality, the world would be in despair and children would suffer along with their mothers. The Girl Effect is a very inspirational because they are an impetus of change and trying to create a better world.
It is a very well written blog post. There are a few things though, The first paragraph states what is going on in the world with girls "my age" which is really good, but I think you need to state what the girl effect is in that paragraph. In the second paragraph I think you need to state more of why it is important, instead of what the girl effect is. Your 3rd paragraph is good, though it gets confusing when it says, "The dream they thought they would keeping dreaming of". Additionally, It sounds a bit like you just took the words straight out of the video for paragraph 2. Your conclusion is good, except that it says " Without gender equality, the world would be in despair and children would suffer along with their mothers," but there already is gender inequality, so it is confusing to make it sound like we have gender equality. Also it is only two sentences. Other than that you did a fantastic job!
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